UHPS Room16 2011

It has been another exciting weekend. This week in our recounts we have tried to include lots of language features to make our writing more interesting. See if you can spot the similes, alliteration, metaphors, adverbs, onomatopoeias and adjectives.

Guy Fawkes- By Gareth M
In the cold dark night. I saw exploding golden fireworks like a leprechaun pot of gold. The firework was a asteroid going to space but exploding half way there like a volcano's lava. I felt excited like I had eaten all of the candy in the whole world. Bang!! One of the fireworks went off- that was one of the biggest ever! Then it was silent. I smelt the last piece of smoke. It was over, but I'm waiting for tomorrow.

Guy forks day-by Pyper N
Smash fizzle bang! The fire works went in the dark blue sky.The fire works looked like fancy dancers dancing in the sky. It made me feel joyful and amazing. After a little while we did sparklers. It made me feel like I was the fire work although I am not a fire work . When I looked up the night was nearly over so we did the last firework and it faded in the night blue sky.

This term we have been writing character descriptions. We have been practising using language features like similes and adjectives to enhance our writing. Here are some samples of descriptions of "General Pandemonium" from Peter Millett's books, "Boy Zero Wannabe Hero!"

General Pandemonium is an evil mad man who wants to take over the world with all his weird creations!! His nose is like a elephant trunk. His evil creations fail all the time. The pointy stick up bits in his hair are like twigs. He has swirly eyeballs. It looks like he's hypnotised. He's got chunks of snot up his nose. He's also pretty hip and a show off too. His chin is like a fat sword. His teeth are little bricks. HE want to destroy Boy Zero and take over the world! By Rebeccca

General Pandemonium is a strange show off and a greedy rock star! His ears are like monkey's ears and he has a sharp, pointy nose like a sword fish or a needle. He is an evil, plotting master and a greedy evil genius. His hair is like devil's horns and he fights "Boy Zero" until he would win. He is a fiery volcano burning villages down and he is a hypnotizing, brain-washing master mind. He is very tempered and has a puppy called "Miffy Whiffy" By Gareth

General Pandemonium has a difficult name. The General is un-calm about almost everything. General Pandemonium has big googly eyes that stare blankly at the outside world. General Pandemonium also shows off to everyone. He tries to take over the world with evil plans like making a pop song that turns people into break dancing zombies. Even though the General is a super villian he loves poodles! He doesn't think about what he says so when he is finished he realises he shouldn't have said that! The general has a nose as long and as pointy as a parrots beak. Wicked ideas come pouring out of his evil mind.General Pandemonium is always hungry for fame!! By Nadia

General Pandemonium has brain washing eyes like he has just been knocked by a tennis ball. The evil man is trying to take over the earth with his vicious plans. All his plans are failures. His long nose is a base ball bat. His cruel mouth spreads across the universe. He is a volcano that erupts every second with plans. His chin is like a lazer that is about to fire. What is he going to do next? He is always silly x 3000. By James

Have a listen to some more of our fantastic poetry recitals!!

Have a look at how Jade and Gareth have followed our success criteria and tried to MIB their writing by improving the verbs in the writing or using adjectives and language features like similes.

The play station game- By Gareth
I zoomed up the stairs to my room and slammed the door. "Don't slam the door please!" shouted my dad. "Sorry!" I replied in a squeaky mouse voice. Then I turned on the play station and jumped back on my coach and grabbed the remote. I clicked on one of the people on the screen and it went completely dark like a dragons cave. Two blocks came up in one of the corners showing your battle life. My colour was red and his was blue. I got two cards, and they connected and made a new card called "Two headed thunder dragon". It had 2800 power points. It was the strongest card have ever made.
Then he put a card down. "I wonder what that is?" I whispered. He clicked on my card and my card lit up in flames. He destroyed it because his card was worth 3000 power points. It was called "Blue eyes white dragon."


Robot wars! By Jade

"Jade, come down stairs and play robots!" Tyler called from down stairs. I rushed down. I have not played robots in a while. I got handed a remote from my dad. The screen shot on as fast as lightening. I sat on the soft sofa. "Are you ready to play?" said a man. It was coming from the screen. I was the smart green robot.

Our first game was getting goals from other robots. When Tyler was goal keep, no one got a goal. It was my last goal.. I went for the green, Tyler missed it! "Wow!" Green is very useful!

Over the last two weeks we have been learning about the number 1000. We have been developing an understanding of the quantity of 1000 and also developing an understanding of the relationship between 1000, 100 and 10. At the beginning of the period Mrs Millett told us that we were going to have to collect 1000 items.

We talked about some ideas for our collections and decided upon the following collections:
Stickers- Ben and Kieren, Nadia and Prinisha, Sunghyun and Sam
Ice block sticks- Rebecca and Daniel, Amber and Pyper, Keita and James
Finger prints- Vasti and Gauri, Jude and Joshua, Stani and Estelle
Stones- Jack and Gareth
Split peas- Liri and Jessie
Toothpicks- Jade and Sherise
Counters- Monique and Natasha
Bottle caps- Logan and Adam.

After several busy days of collecting we were ready to present our collections and all of our learning. Today we shared our collections with the class and also completed a "Define Map" where we defined 1000 in all the ways we had used to collect the magic total. Here are some of our presentations:

Mr Millett's latest boy Zero book has just been released! We were so excited when we discovered that he had dedicated this book to "Room 16"!!! We have been writing opinions about his books. The best opinion will be winning a "Zero G cupcake". Wow- Here are our opinions:

I like Mr Millett's books because:

General Pandemonium is so funny. He talks for too long....beep! Heh, I have not stopped recording my message yet. Thanks for dedicating the book to us. By Jade P

It's so fantastic that it blowed my mind away when I was reading it . My favourite character is General Pandemonium. He's funny and also his new inventions are called, "Zero G cupcakes". I hope Charlie saves the world!! By Monique F

You have written funny stuff. I like General Pandemonium because he was pretending to be a rock star and turned every one in to zombies. I also liked it when General Pandemonium was trying to destroy the earth. By Ben M

Because General Pandemonium is hilarious, evil and destructible! By Gareth M

It's got funny words and exhilarating events and it makes me crack up. I like the funny way you did General Pandemonium with a big nose. I like the funny pictures and how you dedicated the book to R16. By Rebecca E

Because Master Sushi is cool and all the characters are cool! By Daniel W

Because they are really funny. My best character is Charlie Applejack. Boy Zero books are the funniest books in the whole of NZ. By Stani M

Because Charlie tries to beat the worst superhero in the world and it was a bit weird. General P is a loser! By Gauir R

Because it has interesting words and it is cool and awesome! I like the 3rd book because Charlie wears a huge, heavy shoe. You are the best book writer! By Sunghyun Y

Because the super hero is so amazing. He can fight and fly and fight General Pandemonium. I like Mr Millett's books- I love them! By Adam W

Because it has lots of expression and jokes in it! by Vasti V

Because they are very funny and interesting. My favourite characters are Charlie and Genreral P. General Pandemonium is very funny! By Natasha A

Because the third book is dedicated to Room 16 and I am in Room 16. We were excited- it was cool. Very , very cool. By Joshua S

Because General Pandemonium and Charlie Applejack are very funny! By Keita T

Because Charlie Applejack is very funny. He said "Charlie Applejack to the rescue!" and then he tripped on his shoe lace and then said, "Charlie Applejack to the rescue ... again" By Prinisha N

Because Charlie Applejack always saves the day. Like when he flyed up and caught the post. It was a very good story. When General Pandemonium tried to plummet the pants it was a very funny bit. Lieutenant Curse said, "Your doll is ready for inspection" General Pandemonium was cross and said, "It is an action figure!" By Amber

Because the books are soo good! I can't even tell you how awesome they are!!!! They're are so hilarious! By Logan K

Because they are funny and because they are appropriate and also because the characters are funny. The pictures are also hilarious. By Kieren E

Because you think of everybody. My favourite character is General Pandemonium. I'm wondering what your next book would be like? General Pandemonium is always trying to take over the world! By James B

Because it is funny and I like General Pandemonium and Charlie Applejack. By Estelle D

Because Boy Zero is so awesome. I also like your books because I've read book 1 and 2. My favourite was Charlie Applejack, Commander Ron and Josh. I've been waiting for Book 3, and I can't wait for Book 4! By Jack H

Because they are funny and interesting. I think Charlie Applejack is funny! By Pyper N

Because the books are super funny especially General Pandemonium. I love all your Boy Zero series. What is the next series going to be? I can't wait until the next one comes out. The Petrifying plot of the plummeting pants, The attack of the brain dead break dancing zombies and the curse of the catastrophic cupcakes are all "Supertastic!" By Nadia L

Because he started to write when he was 8 years old. He uses laughter and excitement and his kindness in his stories. The books are the funniest and well written as well. I think he is the best story teller ever! They are so funny, the whole class starts to laugh and and especially me. I really, really love your books. Every time you write you get a lot better! I think the cupcake will be delicious. I think you are great! By Sherise N

Because Charlie Applejack is funny and General Pandemonium is funny. By Liri J

Because General Pandemonium is funny. He tries to get Charlie Applejack with funny machines. He tries to destroy the world. By Jessie P

Because his books are: evil, powerful, unstoppable and funny! Charlie Applejack is really funny. By Jude P

Because the characters are cool! My favourite is Charlie Applejack. He wants to go to the Super School, but misses out!! Ouch! By Sam C